CAMBRIDGE IELTS 10 - Academic - Writing Task 1 - Test 1
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of energy consumption and the greenhouse gas emitted by this energy consumption in an average Australian family.
Generally, heating accounts for the highest usage of energy, yet the largest proportion of carbon dioxide emissions belongs to water heating.
There is a high incidence of the energy used for heating, with 42%, followed by the use of water heating, at 30%. In contrast, the figure for other appliances comprises 15%, which is twice as high as the percentage of energy used for refrigeration. Eventually, the consumption of energy for lighting and cooling experiences a downward trend, with 4% and 2%.
Simultaneously, the uses of water heating and other appliances are the main causes of the greenhouse exhaust gas, with 32% and 28% respectively. Heating, surprisingly, is only responsible for 15% of total gas emissions, this figure is approximately the same as that for refrigeration. The proportion of greenhouse gas emissions from lighting and cooling makes up 8% and 3% in turn.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29518072289 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20097264395 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560240963855 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 19.0521488289 43.030603864 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.875 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.23603664747 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354141199519 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177405636906 0.103423049105 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.27878075687 0.0843802449381 330% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2895607441 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.359754735772 0.0819641961636 439% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29518072289 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20097264395 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560240963855 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 19.0521488289 43.030603864 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.875 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.23603664747 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354141199519 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177405636906 0.103423049105 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.27878075687 0.0843802449381 330% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2895607441 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.359754735772 0.0819641961636 439% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.