The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries.

The graph shows data to us about science qualifications, which include master’s degree, bachelor’s degree, school leaving exams and no qualification in science, in Malaysia and Singapore as percentage.
If we look carefully, the highest rate in graph belong to no qualification in science by %65 for Malaysia and by %60 for Singapore whereas Malaysian and Singaporean people, who have master’s degree, have the lowest percentage in graph by %3. Surprisingly, their master’s degrees are same.
To continue with, in comparison, the rate of bachelor’s degree of the Singaporean people are as much 2 times as Malaysian’s bachelor’s degree, which have %10, by %20. In addition, percentage of Singaporean people, who enter the school leaving exams, are less %5 than Malaysian people, who have %35, by %30.
To sum up, we can understand from this graph, generally, Although master’s degrees are same, Singaporean people are more successful than Malaysian people about attending and to science.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, whereas, in addition, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67741935484 4.92477711251 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52959245421 2.65546596893 133% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3950229497 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.666666667 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.23603664747 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0876164971823 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465299157459 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404851160627 0.0843802449381 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659801890925 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327401854285 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 61.2550243902 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 11.4140731707 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.4329268293 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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