The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017.

Essay topics:

The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017.

The bar chart illustrates the number of patients sorted by age admitted to casualty department in Northern Ireland in the last month of two consecutive years 2016 and 2017.

It is evident that people under 5 and over 75 made the most appearance at this department in the hospital. Moreover, the year of 2017 witnessed a marginal increase, which showed minimal divergence among all mentioned categories.

As can be seen from the chart, in December 2016, nearly 65 individuals per 1000-population attended ED, while infants under 5 were less than two-third as likely to undergo urgent treatment . After a year, both the figures for those whose ages were more than 75 and less than 5 experienced a rise of 10 in every 1000 people to about 75 and 55 respectively.

Looking at the data source in more detail, in december 2016 ,children aged 5 to 15 were the least to pay a visit to emergency room ,which accounted for about 2%. Meanwhile, other three age groups ranging from 16 to 74 contributed nearly 30% to total attenders. In December 2017, nearly no disparity was seen in the figures for the 4 groups of patients from 5 to 15, 16 to 44, 45 to 64,65 to 74 compared to the previous year.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, moreover, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 985.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6682464455 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75375968763 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 106.607317073 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644549763033 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3767429795 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.125 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3254137533 0.215688989381 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120919307224 0.103423049105 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616550598785 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170350122236 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060667167158 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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