The chart below shows the globe sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and,make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the globe sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and,make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates the information about the sales of four various types of digital games such as mobile phone games, online games, console games and handheld games in the worldwide which was in six years during 2000 and 2006.Moreover , units were measured in billion $.

In overall, handheld games constituted a major for selling in the world since mobile phone games sold in least amount. However, there were lots of transformation can be noticed in the sales of all kinds of games who was in the globe over the periods.

With regards to the bar graph, between 2000 and 2006, the sales of handheld games were most popular in the worldwide which accounted from nearly 12 billion $ to approximately 18 billion dollars followed by console games. Likewise, console games selling started from 6 billion $ in 2000 and decrease dramatically at around 3 billion dollars in the end of the periods in the globe.

The chart further proves that online games accounted for 1 billion dollar for world’s sales and experienced a little more than eight-folds to above 8 billion $ in the last year. Lastly, the amount of mobile phone games remained relatively constant at 7 billion dollars during 2005 and 2006.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
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Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... six years during 2000 and 2006.Moreover , units were measured in billion $. ...
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Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
... 2006.Moreover , units were measured in billion $. In overall, handheld games cons...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the least'.
Suggestion: in the least
...the world since mobile phone games sold in least amount. However, there were lots of tra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, lastly, likewise, moreover, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07462686567 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64054914068 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572139303483 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8273577877 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.714285714 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184183739563 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095120230624 0.103423049105 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336559737514 0.0843802449381 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121585735376 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259362911003 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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