The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart elucidates the information regarding the proportion of people visiting at cinema, theatre, library and zoo. The percentage is divided into three categories which are new migrants born in other countries, new migrants born in english speaking countries and the people who born in canada.

Having quick glance it is apparent that highest proportion of masses visiting cinemas in Canada are the born in Canada which are 70% whereas, 65% migrants from other english nations visit there and only 50% migrants from other countries go there, probing ahead, significantly the lowest proportion of inhabitants can be seen who are visiting the theatre which are 10% migrants from other countries, 25% from english speaking countries and 20% from Canada born masses.

Moving towards the rest of the information the sufficient amount of folks visited on library in Canada are the new migrants born in other countries which are 50% although, 40% new migrants born in english speaking regions go there and 37% who born in Canada visited there. Lastly, the minimum proportion of migrants born in other countries are 35% , 50% from new migrants born in english speaking countries visiting there and 42% who born in Canada.

To sum up, it is appeared that there are fewer people who visit at theatre. On the other hand, the people who go to cinema have greatly risen proportion of inhabitants rather than another three categories.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (28 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tly the lowest proportion of inhabitants can be seen who are visiting the theatre...
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Line 9, column 348, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...migrants born in other countries are 35% , 50% from new migrants born in english s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, lastly, regarding, whereas, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1213.0 965.302439024 126% => OK
No of words: 235.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16170212766 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55452955151 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43829787234 0.547539520022 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 353.7 283.868780488 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.874475404 43.030603864 283% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.285714286 112.824112599 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5714285714 22.9334400587 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107538108314 0.215688989381 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724392474413 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355652861882 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828063778377 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181876067223 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.2329268293 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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