The chart gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002

Essay topics:

The chart gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002

The bar graph illustrates the various sports which were enjoyed by both boys and girls in New Zealand in the year of 2002.

According to the given information,it is clear that the most popular sport among girls was netball,with participation of 25 percent,whereas,a similar percentage of boys prefer soccer,which was their most favourite sport.However,the proportion of boys who enjoyed playing cricket was only 10 percent,while,hardly any girl took part in this sport.Furthermore,in case of swimming,the percentage of girls were higher as compared to boys,25 percent and 13 percent,respecrively.

The chart further reveals that fewer girls participated in the martial arts,about 13 percent compared to approximately 11 percent of boys.Next,in athletics,in comparison with their counterpart,girls were slightly higher,6 percent and 4 percent,respectively.Apart from this,participation of both genders in basketball and tennis showed a similar pattern,where 9 percent of boys preferred to both games,but,girls were little higher in tennis (8 percent) as compared to basketball (6 percent).

In conclusion,it can be inferred from the chart that the participatiom of both genders in sports were fairly equal,however,their sporting preferences tend to be different.

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Average: 8 (6 votes)

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'whereas', 'while', 'apart from', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273504273504 0.268076937826 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.123931623932 0.116061578633 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0641025641026 0.0759168565197 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0470085470085 0.0366838410393 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0213675213675 0.0131127313244 163% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136752136752 0.155750635184 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0384615384615 0.0379272487307 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 4.44284346165 2.65546596893 167% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025641025641 0.0210936926555 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0854700854701 0.0948980150116 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0042735042735 0.00437022459523 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0213675213675 0.00967000014798 221% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1269.0 1161.00487805 109% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.9 91% => OK
Chars per words: 7.05 5.90752243213 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73763899035 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.411111111111 0.337110787985 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.355555555556 0.247514529752 144% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.244444444444 0.171178102325 143% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.2 0.112407865282 178% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.44284346165 2.65546596893 167% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.546246751206 112% => OK
Word variations: 57.3148152409 49.3433353143 116% => OK
How many sentences: 4.0 8.93414634146 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 45.0 23.0094962315 196% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 167.842746343 42.9750493124 391% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 317.25 135.714022679 234% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.0 23.0094962315 196% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.25 0.689975730869 326% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 1.48048780488 1621% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 80.5555555556 47.7609492067 169% => OK
Elegance: 2.33333333333 2.94281807926 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31494917699 0.418131533498 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.29804676437 0.181151798455 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.09919354274 0.0850326197045 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.706616315825 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 2.22044604925e-16 0.157042692854 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.251780222327 0.228904883108 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979907812531 0.108899403657 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.331917512286 0.367819155151 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0878107715985 0.0812612215331 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251780222327 0.316326947829 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979907812531 0.0921553760075 106% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70731707317 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.08536585366 24% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.16585365854 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 4.0 7.1512195122 56% => OK

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Rates: 78.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9