The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart enumerates amount of Japanese tourists moving abroad over the period of 1985 to 1995 and the line graph depicts the proportion of Japanese people who are visiting to Australia from the decade of 1985 to 1984.

It is vivid that, in 1985 to 1990, number of people who traveling to oversea which rapidly rose from 5 million people to 11 million where as the similar trend occurs in another illustration which was proportion of Japanese coming to Australia, it's trend was increased from 2℅ to near about 5℅ by the year of 1985 to 1988

Furthermore, by the 1991 to 1993, the trend of Japanese tourist was increased from around 11 million people to 12 million and it was noticed a sudden growth from 12 million to 15 million people while the multitude of visiting in Australia experienced a fluctuations from the period of 1988 to 1990 and again it was increased rapidly from 4℅ to around 7℅
After that it was decreased by 6℅ the end of the year

Overall, the bar graph shows that the increased number of people from the decade of 1985 to 1995 an those who chose the Australia nation they gone through the fluctuations from 1988 to 1990.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...ose from 5 million people to 11 million where as the similar trend occurs in another ill...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a fluctuation' or simply 'fluctuations'?
Suggestion: a fluctuation; fluctuations
...de of visiting in Australia experienced a fluctuations from the period of 1988 to 1990 and aga...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 98, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... people from the decade of 1985 to 1995 an those who chose the Australia nation th...
^^
Line 8, column 98, Rule ID: AN_THEN[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'and those'?
Suggestion: and those
... people from the decade of 1985 to 1995 an those who chose the Australia nation they gon...
^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 143, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'went'?
Suggestion: went
...ose who chose the Australia nation they gone through the fluctuations from 1988 to 1...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63768115942 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46201510051 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463768115942 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 103.0 22.4926829268 458% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 357.0 43.030603864 830% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 480.0 112.824112599 425% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 103.5 22.9334400587 451% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15506169819 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176639528931 0.103423049105 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761200703301 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998169424034 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841630832242 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 52.2 13.2329268293 394% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -7.69 61.2550243902 -13% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.9 10.3012195122 387% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.82 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.88 8.06136585366 135% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.4329268293 232% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 43.2 10.9970731707 393% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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