The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town a and b in two years 1960 and 2010

Essay topics:

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town a and b in two years, 1960 and 2010.

The given list of pie-charts illustrates information regarding the change in employment distribution(percentage-wise) across three different sectors for two towns over a period of 50 years from 1960 to 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that over time, the employment opportunities in the manufacturing field rose significantly in both the places in comparison to the other two sectors, where working percentage decreased substantially.

As is given in the chart, the proportion of people working in the manufacturing sector in town A went up by more than double, reaching 64% in 2010 from 29%. However, the other sectors witnessed a sharp plummet of 50%, with sales and service working proportion fell down to just 20% and 16% respectively.

Turning to town B, exactly 7 out of 10 people were engaged in the sales department, which further reduced to nearly 5 in 2010. In contrast, the percentage in the manufacturing field climbed up by 15%, reaching 25% in 2010. On the other hand, with a 2% increase, about 22% of people were reported in the service sector in 2010.

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Average: 9.6 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 896.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06214689266 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40400989242 2.65546596893 128% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604519774011 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1559655471 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404284467007 0.215688989381 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15999528357 0.103423049105 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832836373275 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211538723202 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746874695604 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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