children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie gra

Essay topics:

children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

Write at least 150 words.

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The pie chart represents the information about the survey to know what people of various age groups feel happy most. The piecharts are indicates in the form of ratio.

Generally, achieving at the work makes happy the most of the age groups people and traveling are well known between the age 14 to 30 and living with the family people over 30 like the most.

Firstly, in the age groups under 30 achieving achievement at the work are most glad things covering around thirty percent from the total ratio of the chart and moving forward their hobbies is the best way to get happy covering approximately twenty two percentage of the total chart ratio they also feel fresh or exciting if they are involved in other factor but in the little ration of fifty percent.

Secondly, people over thirty feels most reliable if they get achievements at the work covering thirty two percent which is one percent more than people under thirty age groups. Likewise, at the age of thirties most of the people like to do according to their hobbies covering twenty four percent i the total chart. Similarly, at the old age people like to live with family and live with them showing fourteen percent from the total chart.

Votes
Average: 9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-two
...way to get happy covering approximately twenty two percentage of the total chart ratio the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey get achievements at the work covering thirty two percent which is one percent ...
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Line 13, column 278, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-four
... do according to their hobbies covering twenty four percent i the total chart. Similarly, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, likewise, second, secondly, similarly, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1004.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75829383886 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28992851454 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483412322275 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 305.1 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.931917265 43.030603864 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.428571429 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 5.23603664747 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0298806411107 0.215688989381 14% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.018071203496 0.103423049105 17% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186233519763 0.0843802449381 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0213888532875 0.15604864568 14% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166102445366 0.0819641961636 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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