The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram depicts all steps, ingredients and equipment how to produce carbonated softed drinks.
This process involves 5 main stages begining which water cleaning and ending up with packaging as follow.
First things first, the raw water go through filter then with the supporting of some chemicals, water will be softer and ready for next steps.
Then, water is pushed by a pump to electric heaters. At this stages, it undergo coolling pipe which is heating evaporation and carbon dioxin is created as an extra outcome product.
Afterwards,it pass to a pipe and ready for the mixing step. In this stage, colouring, syrup and flavour are added in a huge mixing tank. Next, after the go through the last filter, it is filled in bottles and cans depend on the customer demand.
In the last stage, these solf drinks bottles and cans are packaged into box and then delivery to supermarket for selling.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 96, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...r cleaning and ending up with packaging as follow. First things first, the raw water go ...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill be softer and ready for next steps. Then, water is pushed by a pump to elect...
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Line 4, column 57, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ushed by a pump to electric heaters. At this stages, it undergo coolling pipe which ...
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Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'undergoes'?
Suggestion: undergoes
...to electric heaters. At this stages, it undergo coolling pipe which is heating evaporat...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...s an extra outcome product. Afterwards,it pass to a pipe and ready for the mixing...
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Line 5, column 15, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'passes'?
Suggestion: passes
... extra outcome product. Afterwards,it pass to a pipe and ready for the mixing step...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 754.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92810457516 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43281284208 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686274509804 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 220.5 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9755111588 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7777777778 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.23603664747 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0517998466673 0.215688989381 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.020824274632 0.103423049105 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264763271484 0.0843802449381 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0305393141477 0.15604864568 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027084784812 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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