The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks

The given pictorial details about the process by which carbonated drink is manufactured.
Overall, it can be said that, the process takes place in five stages which begin with cleaning of water and end on the boxing of bottles and cans which is sent to supermarket for retails.
It is manifest from the picture that, in the begining, the raw water is filtered before water softener the chemicals are added.The clean water is pumped.Then, the pumped water is heated in an electric heater.The warm water is cooled with the help of cooling pipe.This cooled water is reacted with carbon dioxide.
In the next step, the carbonated water is poured into the mixing tank for colouring, syrup and flavouring and this water is filtered.After that, the filtered water is filled into bottles and cans for packing.Finally, the dispatched bottles and cans are sent to supermarkets for its sale.

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Average: 5.6 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... water softener the chemicals are added.The clean water is pumped.Then, the pumped ...
^^^
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Then
...als are added.The clean water is pumped.Then, the pumped water is heated in an elect...
^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...d water is heated in an electric heater.The warm water is cooled with the help of c...
^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...is cooled with the help of cooling pipe.This cooled water is reacted with carbon dio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the mixing tank for colouring, syrup and flavouring and this water is filtered.Af...
^^
Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
... flavouring and this water is filtered.After that, the filtered water is filled into...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...illed into bottles and cans for packing.Finally, the dispatched bottles and cans are s...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Finally, the dispatched bottles and cans are sent to supermarkets for its sale.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 147.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01360544218 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48200454523 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77732700308 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557823129252 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0701970358 43.030603864 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.25 112.824112599 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.75 22.9334400587 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890918811826 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982724927255 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123075520767 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982724927255 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123075520767 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.2329268293 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.06136585366 121% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... water softener the chemicals are added.The clean water is pumped.Then, the pumped ...
^^^
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Then
...als are added.The clean water is pumped.Then, the pumped water is heated in an elect...
^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...d water is heated in an electric heater.The warm water is cooled with the help of c...
^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...is cooled with the help of cooling pipe.This cooled water is reacted with carbon dio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the mixing tank for colouring, syrup and flavouring and this water is filtered.Af...
^^
Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
... flavouring and this water is filtered.After that, the filtered water is filled into...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...illed into bottles and cans for packing.Finally, the dispatched bottles and cans are s...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Finally, the dispatched bottles and cans are sent to supermarkets for its sale.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 147.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01360544218 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48200454523 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77732700308 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557823129252 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.0701970358 43.030603864 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.25 112.824112599 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.75 22.9334400587 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890918811826 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982724927255 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123075520767 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982724927255 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123075520767 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.2329268293 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.06136585366 121% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.