The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Here, we have three maps. The map illustrate that the changes the construction from 1950, 1980 and last 2010 in west park secondary school.
Overall, 3 decades gap seen overall in school changes. Car park, science block established in 1980 and as it is in 2010. However, houses were out of the map on the first refurbishment.
In details, in 1950 west park secondary school had for part (houses, school, farmland, and playground). After three decades, car park and science block were added Instead of houses. Subsequently school was diverted into school main building. However, playground is as it is due to its demand. Lastly sports field additional area is established in place of farmland.
On the contrary, different types of scenario are represented on West park secondary school in 2010. Increased amount of vehicle, it would be a compulsion for the school to enhance their car parking. So that sports field area and play playground area were sorters, to increase the car parking. Science block and main school building were same as in a in the 1980.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nce block were added Instead of houses. Subsequently school was diverted into school main bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, second, so, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 882.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95505617978 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68638033666 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.3814857858 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.0 112.824112599 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.7142857143 22.9334400587 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.23603664747 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258710073802 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890902318848 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925767595442 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174685953853 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0972299123581 0.0819641961636 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 61.2550243902 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.6 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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