The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagrams give information about three major life stages of salmon, from different perspectives such as reproduction, growing to maturity and migration. In general, salmon could grow form eggs to as large as 70 to 76 centimeters and live in at least three different type of water environments.

The life cycle of a salmon starts with tiny salmon eggs laid by mature fish in slow moving upper river, covered with reeds as well as small stones in case of potential predators. Normally it would take five to six months for baby salmon referred as ‘fry’ to born. Flowing with fast water into lower river, baby salmons would spent approximately 4 years in the lower river until they turn into teenager salmon ‘smolt’ which length to twelve to fifteen centimeters. Naturally, smolt then migrated to the open sea to enjoy a more abundant food source and grow to maturity as adult salmon, the size of which is about 70 to 76 centimeters, this stage usually takes around 5 years.

After salmon turn to maturity, they would however return to their birthplace, the upper river to lay eggs for reproduction, and the new life cycle of salmon begins again.

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Average: 7.3 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...er into lower river, baby salmons would spent approximately 4 years in the lower riv...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to lower river, baby salmons would spent approximately 4 years in the lower river...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, well, at least, in general, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 977.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95939086294 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81795848084 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629441624365 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9844221561 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.571428571 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.23603664747 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203927602693 0.215688989381 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961480981169 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541172057174 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142042088599 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00755010514207 0.0819641961636 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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