The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The illustrations demonstrate the way in which cement and concrete are produced.

Overall, it is man made and a lengthy process despite being mostly done by machinery. The process start with limestone and clay are crushed and product cement. After, ends with concrete.

In the initial stage, limestone and clay are crushed. In the next step, powder shipped in a mixer. After,it is shifted down in tube and heat provide into a rotating heater . The heat mixer comes from the bottom. Then, collecting material turn into cement by grinder. Finally, it is separated into bags.

Concrete is made of the half gravel, 10% of water, quarter sand and 15% cement. All of there are added together in a drum and rotated until concrete is made.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d clay are crushed and product cement. After, ends with concrete. In the initia...
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...is shifted down in tube and heat provide into a rotating heater . The heat mixer...
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...n tube and heat provide into a rotating heater . The heat mixer comes from the b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 621.0 965.302439024 64% => OK
No of words: 125.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.968 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.34370152488 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45469146821 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 190.8 283.868780488 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 22.4926829268 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.9541140286 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 51.75 112.824112599 46% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.4166666667 22.9334400587 45% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.41666666667 5.23603664747 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158350073072 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051279774347 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538061984103 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999692579711 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324973395325 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 13.2329268293 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.79 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.07 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 3.5 11.4329268293 31% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.9970731707 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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