ELTS 10 Test 3 Writing task 1 The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

The two bar charts demonstrate the situations of the alumnus in UK who were not full-time employees after graduation in 2008.
Generally, the two charts have an identical pattern, except for the fact that the number of graduate students was 10 times higher than postgraduates. Most of the alumnus determined for higher education, whereas there was only a small number of students who involved in voluntary activities.
In particular, at the time, there was 17735 students had a part-time job. The number of unemployed students accounted for 16235, but the number of college graduates pursued further study was as twice as such a figure (nearly 30000), which is the highest figure. Opposite to that, only 3500 people did voluntary work.
Regard the second chart, the part-time job holders number was around 2500, and 2700 studied for higher levels. Nearly a half of that number was unsuccessfull in job application. Even in this graph, volunteers only took up a small number (less than 350) in compared to others criteria.

Votes
Average: 5.8 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...igher education, whereas there was only a small number of students who involved in voluntary acti...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...han 350 in compared to others criteria.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, whereas, except for, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07738095238 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72412975765 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4413918262 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7777777778 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158043790705 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732069309361 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631798498392 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117720583037 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693159912258 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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