The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Essay topics:

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

The line graph illustrates how many visitors visit to the different two new music websites on the Internet during the duration of 15 days.

Overall, It is viewed that, the highest number of people delve music on the pop parade than on the music choice in the recorded days except on the 12th and 13th days.

To begin, pop parade stands at approximately 12 thousands visitors on the start day and remains the same number on the third day with brief drip on the second day. Then, the number of people consistently decreases till fifth day with a slight rise on the sixth day accounted for almost 78 thousands. Subsequently, pop parade has around 150 thousands visitors on the 11th day with a great fluctuations between 7th and 9th day. At last day, pop parade has 170 thousands visitors after tremendous declines on 12th and 13th day.

On the contrary, on the 1st day, music choice has 40 thousands visitors and went down to 20 thousands. Then the number of visitors increase to 120 thousands on the 11th day with many fluctuations under 40 thousands for 7th days. Then, the number of visitors relies on near 80 thousands on the 15th day with a gradual decline and minor fluctuation.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'fluctuation'?
Suggestion: fluctuation
...s visitors on the 11th day with a great fluctuations between 7th and 9th day. At last day, p...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n, the number of visitors relies on near 80 thousands on the 15th day with a grad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, then, third, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6985645933 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56222664492 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502392344498 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.2433233151 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.111111111 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113259232696 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621998354118 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712832062631 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110961599452 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825497348733 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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