the graph below shows cinema attendance by age in Great Britain

Its is clearly notice from the graph that in initial period all age people who were went to cinema was below than 20% ,however ,the ratio increased dramatically in next year and the percentage of adolescence rose sharply and touched the feet of 60% in 2000 .Moreover, the propaganda of juvenile to attend cinema followed the ups and downs trend all the year and it was accounted approximately 30% in end of the period.
Probing further, from starting period the percentage of adults remained almost constant till 1988 but in upcoming years it inclined slowly and overlap the figure of children in the year 1992 after that its rose dramatically and in 2000 it was accounted as approx 33% and in terms of older masses it remained almost similar but in last year its swelled up and figured by 10%.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, moreover, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 656.0 965.302439024 68% => OK
No of words: 140.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68571428571 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51408278402 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614285714286 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 201.6 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 70.0 22.4926829268 311% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 22.5 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 328.0 112.824112599 291% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 70.0 22.9334400587 305% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.0 5.23603664747 267% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105084910299 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862547530416 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862547530416 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862547530416 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862547530416 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.7 13.2329268293 270% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.35 61.2550243902 28% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.2 10.3012195122 274% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.11 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.94 8.06136585366 136% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 11.4329268293 245% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.0 10.9970731707 273% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.0658536585 253% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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