The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concert between 2010 and 2015
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups who participate in the music concert. This report belongs to 5 years ( from 2010 to 2015 ). It shows clearly the people who take part in the concert; We can see almost the percentage of the teenager age group increase from 2010 to 2015. But, people who are fifty five years old plus absent from the music concert after 2010. Summarize, we release more teeanager and aldult love music and go to concerts more and more.
In 2010 , the 25’s age attend music concert much with about 50% ( that’s a big number ! ), compared with 55+ ‘s age is about 25% percent. Secondly, because the development society, teenager group can attend the music concert more; we can see that the percentage of teenager group is rate from 40% in 2010 and reach over 70% in 2015, the reason is adolescence today who at least have 1 smartphone , from that they can know more informations. Moreover, the percentage of old people decreases after 5 years ( from about 25% to 20% ) . It's not too much but they can show the evidence that the old people are lost interested in attending the music concert. Besides that, old people can see the concert on their smartphone display.
Moreover, the 25’s age group and U40 group's percentage also increase after 5 years. But , in two years ( 2011 and 2012 ) , the percentage is decrease a little ; I think the reason why the percentage is different compare with teeanager ons, is the slowdown of economical society in this years, and they spend this time for find jobs or live a life normally, so the entertainment is not important in this time
Summarize, the graph shows us the percentage of other groups. It is not easy to decide the reason why the percentage changes. But I think my opinion can help you . After that, we can see the change of world’s entertainment development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, at least, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 5.60731707317 464% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 965.302439024 158% => OK
No of words: 325.0 196.424390244 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69538461538 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54938305799 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 106.607317073 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489230769231 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 283.868780488 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.1263383741 43.030603864 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 101.733333333 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303799232109 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122932247603 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11193877918 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183965334323 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113873662088 0.0819641961636 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.06136585366 81% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.