The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the percentage of people at different ages attending music concerts in one city from 2010 to 2015. Overall, the attendance rate of people living in this city in music concerts was on the increase, with the exception of those from 55 to 64. In addition, attending music concerts was the most prevalent among people under 25.
In 2010, just over a half of concerts’ attendees were people from 45 to 54 while the participation rate of under 24 people was the same as those from 25 to 44, at 40%. People who were from 55 to 64 years old had an attendance rate of 25% while the percentage of people over 75 going to concerts was the lowest at 10%.
From 2010 to 2015, under 25 people had become the most popular attendees of music concerts as their participation rate saw the most significant change, growing to 70%. The rate of attendees from the 45-54 group decreased by 10% in 2011 before a recovery to 50% in 2015 while the figure for 55-to 64-year-olds went up slightly to 30% in 2011 then went down to 20% in 2015. Over the 5 years, there were 10% participation of people from the 45-54 group and the oldest group.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... in music concerts was on the increase, with the exception of those from 55 to 64. In addition, atten...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 33.7804878049 163% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45454545455 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49092581796 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492822966507 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4566416007 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.375 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236251205151 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145812121028 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114398047154 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190182206078 0.15604864568 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975831718637 0.0819641961636 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 61.2550243902 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... in music concerts was on the increase, with the exception of those from 55 to 64. In addition, atten...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 33.7804878049 163% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45454545455 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49092581796 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492822966507 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4566416007 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.375 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236251205151 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145812121028 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114398047154 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190182206078 0.15604864568 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975831718637 0.0819641961636 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 61.2550243902 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.