http www flickr com photos 100425826 N04 9536264122 IElts Cambridge 9 Test 3 Writing task 1

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http://www.flickr.com/photos/100425826@N04/9536264122/ IElts Cambridge 9, Test 3, Writing task 1.

- By Hoàng Ánh -
A quick look at the graph provided illustrates the percentage of different ages in 2000 as well as the forecasts for about 50 years later in two countries, namely Yemen and Italy

It is clear to be seen that the habitants with 15-59 years made up the largest proportion among both countries from 2000 to 2050. However, this figures is predicted to decrease in 2050. In stark contrast, the 5-decades period will see dramatic increases in the percentages of both population between 0-14 years and 60+ years.

To be more specific, Italy seem to be an aging_population country whi...

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Sentence: However, this figures is predicted to decrease in 2050.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and figures

Sentence: To be more specific, Italy seem to be an aging_population country while the people over 60 years is going to rise from 24.1 to 42.3 in 2050.
Description: The fragment Italy seem to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace seem with verb, past tense

Sentence: An opposite trend is possile to be seen in the number of habitants between 0-14 years and 15-59 years.
Error: possile Suggestion: possible

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