The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

Essay topics: The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

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Given line graph and table illustrates annual visits to Australia by foreigners between 1975 to 2005. It is clearly visible that there is progressive incline in this trend.

The line graph shows that number of visits have increase of more then 3 folds. There is a steady rise between 1975 to 1985 and from 1995 to 2005. but during middle 10 years there is almost double trend. So numbers of visits have increased from 10 million to 30 million in these 30 years.

The given table explains comparisons of visits from five different countries to Australia between 1975 to 2005. largest visits have been seen by South Korea , from 2.9 million to 12.9 millions. Japan is next to South Korea from 3.2 million to 9.1 million. USA , Briton and Europe have shown similar range of increased number. China although have shown similar trend but has increased from 0.3 million to 0.8 million. Although with some differences overall rise has seen from all countries is from 8.8 million to 30.8 million.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...annual visits to Australia by foreigners between 1975 to 2005. It is clearly visi...
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...reased from 0.3 million to 0.8 million. Although with some differences overall rise has ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 823.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84117647059 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31178319398 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.518244458 43.030603864 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.5833333333 112.824112599 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1666666667 22.9334400587 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.41666666667 5.23603664747 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195932083367 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835529201891 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759210721048 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153511095004 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210248545502 0.0819641961636 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.2329268293 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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