Male and female gym membership

Essay topics:

Male and female gym membership

The line graph shows the number of male and female gym membershipduring the period from 1980 to 2010.

It is clearly evident that both men and women membership fluctuated with lows during 1980 to 1990 and high from 2000 to 2005. The number of male gym membership increased continually from two thousandto 4 thousand between 1980 and 1985. Over the next ten years, there was quick reduction in that number. Then it went up again and reached the highest number in 2005, over 5 thousand. And from 2005 to 2010, it declined dramatically to the lowest number-under one thousand.

The line of women gym membership shows that the number fluctuated smoothly during all period. The most women is the gym's member is 2,5 thouand in 1995. And the fewest number is at the beginning of the period with one thousand. It is expected that the trend will be continually stable in some next few years.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'gyms'' or 'gym's'?
Suggestion: gyms'; gym's
...uring all period. The most women is the gyms member is 2,5 thouand in 1995. And the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74838709677 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5797095078 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561290322581 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 198.9 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.4958970042 43.030603864 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.6 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 5.23603664747 15% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239204763334 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945247110422 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113660625443 0.0843802449381 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18898983705 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750118643895 0.0819641961636 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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