Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than about famous people in the history of their country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people’s interest in famous people in the history of their country?
times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">There is an undenying fact that nowadays, most of youngsters have a tendency to have a deep knowledge about celebrities instead of historic people in their own country. The reason for such an issue, in my point of view, is rather surprising.times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">
times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">I deem that due to the massive trend of idolism, fan, especially young people would like to have an insight about their idol. Therefore, they spend much time on getting a sense of what the movie stars dressed or how much does that costs cause people want to imitate famous people on styles and fashion. Because of that, less attention is payed to the famous people in their history. Furthermore, it can be seen that history is not an interesting subject to the young. For example, in 2016, less than one third of Vietnamese students chose history for the national graduation examination. this is an illustration for the reason why youngsters know merely nothing about historical people. this leads to the demand of a resolution for the issue.times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">
times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">So as to increase awareness of the young related to famous people in the country's history, I suggest that the government can promote this through films or movies that broadcast on TV. For instance, chinese movie makers integrate the historical elements including the events and notorious people to chinese dramas such as the Empress of China whose plot is about the only woman in chinese history that ruled the country in the past. Another solution is that singers can use historical material for the songs. In such a method, teenagers can listen to their favorite celebrities and still, get a glimtimes New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">ptimes New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">se of historic people.times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">
times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">In conclusion, it is not easy to change the situation in a short period. it requires times for the young to adopt and acquire knowletimes New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">dgtimes New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">e regarding the history of the country.times New Roman'; font-size:11.0000pt;">
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, regarding, so, still, therefore, third, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 5.60731707317 410% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 965.302439024 209% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 341.0 196.424390244 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92082111437 4.92477711251 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.63947689583 2.65546596893 212% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 179.0 106.607317073 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524926686217 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 283.868780488 200% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.281847798 43.030603864 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.25 112.824112599 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 5.23603664747 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234533855706 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124291757074 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650313626769 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175857859549 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113951720293 0.0819641961636 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 13.2329268293 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 61.2550243902 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 11.4140731707 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 40.7170731707 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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