The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future

Essay topics:

The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.

The two maps illustrate the future plans for office building’s changes in comparison to its present layout. It can be seen clearly that the grass in the West and East of present office building will be knocked down to make way for outdoor seating area and meeting area. While the number of office is predicted to remain stability, the rooms for dining will be removed.
Turning to the West of building, outdoor seating area and chairs are planned to replace grass, and entrance will have no change while there will be the appearance of meeting area, coffee machine and chairs in the East. WCs adjacent to storeroom will be also move to inside right corner of office building.
To the East, the canteen and kitchen are demolished to give way to two new offices. The number of office in the South of building will be also decreased and become bigger in size. Furthermore, entrance which located in between the fourth office from the left and grass in present, will be moved to the middle of this two offices in the future changes of office building.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o inside right corner of office building To the East the canteen and kitchen are ...
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Suggestion: bigger
...lding will be also decreased and become bigger in size Furthermore entrance which located in ...
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Suggestion:
...also decreased and become bigger in size Furthermore entrance which located in be...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the future changes of office building
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 851.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20736531885 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475675675676 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 185.0 22.4926829268 822% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 851.0 112.824112599 754% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 185.0 22.9334400587 807% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.0 5.23603664747 535% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30220032113 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.30220032113 0.103423049105 292% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225040535697 0.15604864568 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862291706111 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 92.7 13.2329268293 701% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -99.38 61.2550243902 -162% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 73.1 10.3012195122 710% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.58 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 15.29 8.06136585366 190% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 11.4329268293 464% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 76.0 10.9970731707 691% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 93.0 11.0658536585 840% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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