The pie charts below show the causes the diseases in developing and developed countries.

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The pie charts below show the causes the diseases in developing and developed countries.

The two diagrams illustrate the differences in diseases in two groups of countries which are developing and developed ones. As can be seen from the pie charts, the proportion of fatal sicknesses is different in the two mentioned groups and infectious and parasitic diseases make up the largest amount in developing nations while that figure in developed one is the smallest.

In developing countries, heart disease accounts for 43%, which is nearly 2 times higher than that in developed ones, 24%. The percentage for cancer makes up 9% in developing nations, which is 12% lower than that in developed ones.

While there is a large number of people having infectious and parasitic diseases in developing countries, which is 46%, that just accounts for only 1% in its counterpart. Other diseases contribute 2% and 54% in developing and developed countries respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... 12% lower than that in developed ones. While there is a large number of people ...
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Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... in developed ones. While there is a large number of people having infectious and parasitic ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 140.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25714285714 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94614933742 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557142857143 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7142646065 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.666666667 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390565084735 0.215688989381 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234969088099 0.103423049105 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509706031193 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288354475708 0.15604864568 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156561569384 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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