The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts compare the percentage of online sales for 4 different retail sectors in New Zealand in two separate years, 2003 and 2013.

Overall, the online sales for clothes and travel decreased significantly in 2013 whereas sales for books and film/music increased dramatically. It is also noticeable that in 2003 travel was the leading retail sector which was replaced by film/music in 2013.

The online sales for clothes dropped from nearly a quarter in 2003 to 16% in 2013, which comprised the lowest figure for online sales. Similarly, online sales for travel was the highest overall in 2003 at more than a third but declined by 10% to 29% in 2013.

Books' figure was the smallest sale in 2003 at 19% but the number grew slightly to more than a fifth in 2013. The online sales for film/music retail sector was 21% in 2003, however, the number rocketed to approximately a third after ten years.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, third, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 760.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87179487179 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51501081935 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 12.0322695367 43.030603864 28% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.571428571 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.23603664747 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461776168218 0.215688989381 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.248318310699 0.103423049105 240% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134407548062 0.0843802449381 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335844829705 0.15604864568 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130308680164 0.0819641961636 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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