The plans below show a public when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

Essay topics:

The plans below show a public when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The two maps illustrate how grand park has been changed from its open in 1920 in the present.
In 1920, Grange park, there were Arnold avenue and Edison street, which had two way for entrance. It is the same in Grange park today. In addition past Grange park had to seats for individual in North West as well as south west corner. On the contrary, in second map there are no seats. In the middle of first map had a big fountain, but in the second map it replaced by rose garden which has been for seats located around it. Moreover, stage for magician in 1920 and it is a demolished in present park as well as replaced by Amphitheatre for concerts. In 1920, grange park had rose garden both opposite side on North and South but in today park only one rose garden situated on the North side.
Moreover, rose garden located on North side near to the ground for water plants. Due to the fact that, rose garden as well as pond for water plants replaced by cafe and children's play area. Glass house replaced by water feature and seeds in 1920 replaced by extra underground car park which is situated in Grange park today.
Overall, there are mean many changes into maps such as stage for magician,fountain, rose garden glasshouse and found for water plants.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, moreover, second, so, well, in addition, such as, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 228.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50438596491 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31024638968 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486842105263 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1272797958 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5833333333 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163053014255 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820987845524 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885881500945 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988716394786 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064379848011 0.0819641961636 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.06136585366 82% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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