At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

It is said that in some countries the number of young adults is surpassing that of older people. The principal benefit of this is the promising growth in general while the main disadvantage is losing the balance in population. In my opinion, the merits of this situation far exceed the demerits.

On the one hand, there is no denying the fact that we as human species are reproducing at an alarming rate. Overpopulation is a serious issue threatening our chance of survival, represented by the growing number of young adults. It can lead to famine, diseases, wars over resources and many other detrimental problems. In India and many other poor countries, for example, deaths by hunger have been rising substantially in recent years due to the non-stop escalation in population.

On the other hand, the increasing figure for young adults means that there are more people joining the labor force. As a result, countries will thrive in economics, education, medical and many other fields. In addition, new generations tend to have entrepreneurial mindsets and think differently towards the environment. For instance, according to recent research conducted by Harvard University, it is recorded that 80% of entrepreneurs are below the age of 40 with nearly 60% of their business models are designed to be environmental friendly. Therefore, they will contribute more to the development and conservation of the human race.

In conclusion, despite there are drawbacks because of the risk of overpopulation, young adults play a vital role in the advancement of humanity.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 965.302439024 137% => OK
No of words: 252.0 196.424390244 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09984140802 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 106.607317073 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 283.868780488 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6810658084 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.769230769 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.23603664747 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166088411269 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563383799908 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839556124134 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097792727352 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919789504315 0.0819641961636 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 40.7170731707 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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