The provided bar chart compares data about daily physical activities performed by Australian men and women in the year 2010. The comparison is demonstrated in terms of multiple age groups.

Essay topics:

The provided bar chart compares data about daily physical activities performed by Australian men and women in the year 2010. The comparison is demonstrated in terms of multiple age groups.

The provided bar chart compares data about daily physical activities performed by Australian men and women in the year 2010. The comparison is demonstrated in terms of multiple age groups.

Overall, the number of females performing physical activities regularly was evidently higher than that of male in 2010 only exception being the teenage and mid-twenties group. Although the gap was slightly bridged between the most senior age group of both genders, on an average the figure of women outweighed men’s.

As is presented in the bar graph, highest number of men (52.8%) participated in physical activities was among the age group of 15 to 24 compared to 47.7% women in the same group. By contrast, middle aged men demonstrated the lowest percentage (39.5%) compared to women in the similar age range. With the growing of age up to 44, the number of males doing physical activities showed a downward trend but after mid-thirties began to rise till the 65 and 65 plus group.

As can be seen in case of women, the age group of 45-54 was seen with the most number of participants in daily activities while the lowest number was seen among the most senior aged women (46.7%). As opposed to the data for men, the figures continued to soar significantly with age.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the highest'.
Suggestion: , the highest
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'compared' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'compares'.
Suggestion: compares
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1054.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9023255814 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68960300138 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544186046512 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 319.5 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6096262236 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.111111111 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458651021057 0.215688989381 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.228108828617 0.103423049105 221% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20827572786 0.0843802449381 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.379485475332 0.15604864568 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.360260944367 0.0819641961636 440% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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