While some people think that accepting life's unfortunate circumstances, such as job dissatisfaction or lack of money is a good habit, others agree that striving to overcome these obstacles will improve the quality of their lives. I am of the opinion that making efforts to change these undesirable conditions will bring about success and a level of fulfilment.
On the one hand, it can be understood that some people would accept whatever challenges life throws at them because of fear of uncertainty, hence the perseverance. Recently, a report from the National Bureau of Statistics, Nigeria has shown that the rate of unemployment has increased drastically by 48% in 2015. Therefore people who are currently employed would want to hold on to their jobs irrespective of their level of satisfaction at the job or whether the remuneration is commensurate with their skill set. As a result of this type of outlook, they would rather stay on the jo and feel safe than taking a chance to seek improvement of their status.
On the other hand, I believe that you cannot keep doing things the same way and expect to see a change so, one has to keep searching for newer ways of doing things to achieve success. A typical example is the popular Nick Vujicic, who was born without limbs. Against all odds, he has become the best selling authour of many inspirational books and also a motivational speaker. Despite his physical disabilities, he empowers people worldwide by sharing his inspirational story of hope and triumph in the midst of adversity. Not only is he a successful man, but he is also a happy and fulfilled man. People like Nick chose not to accept their bad situation, rather they strive for a better life.
In conclusion, although acceptance of unfavourable situations can be beneficial to us in the short term, I believe that trying to overcome such unwanted conditions can lead to a successful and promising future on the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s increased drastically by 48% in 2015. Therefore people who are currently employed would...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 5.60731707317 553% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 965.302439024 168% => OK
No of words: 330.0 196.424390244 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91515151515 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92048903411 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 106.607317073 189% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609090909091 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 283.868780488 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5385809841 43.030603864 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.769230769 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 5.23603664747 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195541381049 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568589599746 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621586611387 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114112717129 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530482371774 0.0819641961636 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 40.7170731707 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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