The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Essay topics:

The table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the amount of visitors to Ashdown museum during the years after and the year before it was modernized. After the table there is the charts that show the result of surveys asking people how satisfied they were with their visit those museum, during the same two periods.

It is obviously that the numbers of visitors significantly increased after the refurbishment from 74,000 before the reconstruction to 92,000 after it had been done. Now lets look at the charts. The year before refurbishment shows a negative pattern: the results of survey illustrate that only 15% of visitors were very satisfied and the number of dissatisfied people was 40%. The year after refurbishment illustrates that the number of dissatisfied visitors declined and became 15%, on a contrary, people who were very satisfied increased to 35%. Comparing the amount of satisfied visitors we can also see an upward trend (it increased from 30% to 40% after the refurbishment).

To sum up, we can say that all work that has been done to attract new visitors to Ashdown Museum has reached its aim.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 142, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are the charts'?
Suggestion: there are the charts
...fore it was modernized. After the table there is the charts that show the result of surveys asking ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this museum' or 'those museums'?
Suggestion: this museum; those museums
...ow satisfied they were with their visit those museum, during the same two periods. It is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 912.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98360655738 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75609260784 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546448087432 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.130081021 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.569454773375 0.215688989381 264% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.239145311841 0.103423049105 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.205526221573 0.0843802449381 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.39167997958 0.15604864568 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.307533094138 0.0819641961636 375% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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