Two bar chart

Essay topics:

Two bar chart

The first bar chart compares the number of graduate students who participated in some works in 2008, and the second bar graph illustrates the quantity of postgraduate students who did some jobs in that year.
It is clear from the two bar charts that apart from graduate and postgraduate students with a full-time work, most of the student graduates continued studying higher and the number of postgraduate students who did voluntary work accounted for the smallest proportion.
In terms of graduate students, the number of students who kept on studying further was highest, at 29,665, while the figure for part-time work was lower, at 17,735. At the same time, there were 16,235 students who were unemployed, compared to 3500 of students who took part in voluntary work.
For postgraduate students, there was the highest number of postgraduate students who continued studying further, at 2,725, whereas the figure for part-time work was lower, at 2,535. Only 1,625 postgraduate students were out of work, which was five times higher than postgraduate students who did voluntary works, at 345.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, whereas, while, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 922.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23863636364 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76281293804 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.7713112448 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.666666667 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.23603664747 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105088380648 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639690710328 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905137626559 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959536065491 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960212492555 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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