The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010.

Overall, the online sale of electronic item and home furnishing dropped, however, the craze for food and video games increased during the five years.

To begin with, in 2005, the majority of online sales was accounted for electronics and appliance sector with 35%, however, this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2010. During the same five year period, the number of people deciding to buy food and beverages online increased and the transactions went from just 22% to 32%, making it the retail sector with the largest proportion of the online market.

In 2005, the home furnishing industry boasted n impressive 25% of the total online sales in Canada. However, by 2010, the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online sales of video games eventually overtook sales of home furnishing, although video games still represented only 23% of the market.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18787878788 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62534094161 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8209037351 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.285714286 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38670108287 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17793872797 0.103423049105 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134919949117 0.0843802449381 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246945699904 0.15604864568 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142698750256 0.0819641961636 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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