The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie chart depict that selling the product through Internet for retailer in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

It is clear that, Electronics product were the most popular among public in 2005 while food and beverage took place instead of electronics in 2010. The least number of dwellers home furniture was bought from online retailers in 2010.

As the graph shows, there was not a notable movement in different four sector during the period from 2005 to 2010. Firstly, the sale of electronic and appliances product was the highest in 2005, at 35% while it declined to 30% in 2010. Afterwards, there was only 22% of revenue income from food and beverage which took first place in the retail online market in 2010 and accounted for about 32%.

Furthermore, people spent 18% of the revenue on the video games in 2005 then the figure went up by 5% in 2010 In the last sector namely, Home furnishings before experiencing a downward annual income in 2010 stood at 15%, it represented at 25% in 2005 in same group.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: sectors
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, then, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 838.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70786516854 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39731681008 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601123595506 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3298089198 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333533296363 0.215688989381 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161647169985 0.103423049105 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109790660549 0.0843802449381 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222666279648 0.15604864568 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121415747901 0.0819641961636 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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