Two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

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Two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

The percentage of retail goods sold in Canada’s online markets in 2005 and 2010 is provided in the pie charts. It is evident that the sales in electronics and appliance as well as home furnishings decreased gradually while the sales of food and beverages plus video games tended to increase in 5 years.
Starting at 35%, the products of electronics and appliance sector became the most purchased in 2005, however, it fell to 30% 5 years later, stood at the second place in 2010. The home furnishings’ sales were inferior to electronics with 25% of goods sold at the beginning of the period, and dropped 10% at the end.
In contrast, an increase was shown in Food and Beverages category also the video games. Stood at 22% in 2005, the F&B sales in Canada became the highest in 2010. The video games figure also climbed slightly with 23% in 2010, a rise of 5% in 5 years.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, second, so, well, while, in contrast, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 727.0 965.302439024 75% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63057324841 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6969088557 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554140127389 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.774682575 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.857142857 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207113157779 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105468814397 0.103423049105 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994871415386 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146380510558 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627497492782 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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