The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

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The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992
Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

The pie charts outline employment scenario of British males and females in six job sectors in 1992 .It is obvious that manual jobs were predominantly done by males whereas a higher percentage of females did clerical jobs .Moreover ,managerial and craft related jobs was engaged by a higher proportion of both genders

As the illustration indicates ,more percentages of British males worked in manual sectors,except in craft -related industries,compared to their female counterparts .For instance ,2% general labourers in Great Britain were men while the female labourers ratio was half of that .Moreover ,24% males worked in numerous other manual jobs while this was only 3% for females.Nevertheless,27% females in craft-related industries marginally exceeded the ratio of males in the same sector

Looking further more into the data , non-manual professions included managerial & professional clerical & other non-manual jobs .Interestingly ,employment rates of females in clerical was five times higher than that of males .This is the job category that many female (31%) we engaged in.Beside over one-third males were in managerial & professional job while almost 30% females were in there positions as well

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, moreover, nevertheless, third, well, whereas, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1028.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64835164835 4.92477711251 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4033914244 2.65546596893 128% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604395604396 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 182.0 22.4926829268 809% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1028.0 112.824112599 911% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 182.0 22.9334400587 794% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 71.0 5.23603664747 1356% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 1.69756097561 1355% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0382018571458 0.215688989381 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382018571458 0.103423049105 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.030273252656 0.15604864568 19% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152885421549 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 96.2 13.2329268293 727% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -130.17 61.2550243902 -213% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 76.6 10.3012195122 744% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.67 11.4140731707 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.35 8.06136585366 215% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 11.4329268293 507% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 74.8 10.9970731707 680% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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