You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. For three of the sectors, it is evident that over this time frame there was significant change in their proportion of online transactions.

At 35% we can see that electronics and appliance sector accounted for the majority of online sales in 2005, but this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2010. During the same five-year period, as an increasing number of people chose to purchase food and beverage online, we can see that transactions went from just 22% to 32%, making it the retail sector with the largest overall proportion of the online market.

In 2005, the home furnishing industry boasted an impressive 25% of the total online sales in Canada. However, by 2010, the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online sales of video games eventually overtook sales of home furnishings, although video games still represented only 23% of the market.

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Average: 5.5 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06666666667 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74683890444 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.13730542 43.030603864 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244115382127 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115565061414 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849560834117 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169240440663 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618444934543 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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