Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music or theatre nd less time on sport How far do you agree with this statement

In the modern world, young people gradually forget cultural activities such as music and theatre and sport which be replaced for these cultural activities.It is leading to this countries are lost traditional culture which passed down by the amcestor

Firstly,young people think that music and theater is boring so their were found out this sport such as volleyball, soccer, badminton to relax .Nowadays,more young people assume that these cultural activities are ancient and inappropriate for the technology world today.

Secondly,almost young people do not spend more time for on cultural activities.They think this activities do not popular so they do not search for information about it.They always spent their time on sport which help improve their health and brain.

Consequently,we will give their the suitable solutions and the reasons.Traditional culture is important due to the fact that it helps people connect with the history of their country.The sport are not always better than these cultural activities.These cultural activities make young people become a creative people and happier in their life.

In conclusion,young people should spend more time on cultural activities less on sport. We should encourage both of them because it is an essential part of their .

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1099.0 965.302439024 114% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60714285714 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.53319913057 2.65546596893 133% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 167.700208706 43.030603864 390% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 219.8 112.824112599 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.2 22.9334400587 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.6 5.23603664747 298% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408198142866 0.215688989381 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.250860254655 0.103423049105 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162202075377 0.0843802449381 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240608048823 0.15604864568 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623858682545 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.6 13.2329268293 186% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 61.2550243902 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.3012195122 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.85 11.4140731707 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 11.4329268293 276% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 25.0 11.0658536585 226% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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