Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music or theatre nd less time on sport. How far do you agree with this statement.

Some people think that young people should spend their free time on cultural activities like music, film and theatre. Others believe that playing sport is better for young people. In my opinion, both culture and sports are important parts of life so young people should do a mixture of both.
Sport should be an essential part of everyone’s life. Sport gives young people the chance to exercise, which helps people to keep their body in a good shape.... Sport also teaches young people about rules and teamwork. Culture activities are good for the health of the mind and spirit and allow young people to be creative and experience different worlds. However going to the theater or learning a musical instrument can be expensive. Sport activities can be less expensive but can be dangerous and lead to injury.
In my opinion, doing only one type of activity- just sport or just music, for example- can be bad. Many young people concentrate on one activity in order to become the best, like young sports stars. This can put a lot of pressure on them and make them less interesting than someone who does a variety of things.
I believe that young people should have the chance to do a variety of activities and that a balance of sport and cultural activities is best.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to keep their body in a good shape.... Sport also teaches young people about rules a...
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Line 2, column 361, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...eative and experience different worlds. However going to the theater or learning a musi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1054.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45248868778 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9261536703 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0769230769 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337152279739 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130392166583 0.103423049105 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079197098053 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236538568935 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628695818678 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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