04/11/2017
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a freind who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this freind. In your letter
give details of your study plan
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear John,
I am writing to ask you about a favor. As you know, I am going to study in your country for a year. In fact, I arrive on 29th August and my studying begins on 1st September. Fortunately, my curriculum has been sent to me in advance; so, I knew my schedule already. Apparently, I will study from Monday to Friday, my lectures and classes will start at 08:15 am and be finished by 04:00 pm. Consequently, I have a plethora of spare time that can be devoted to a part-time job.
Frankly, I need this job because it is the quickest and the most efficient way to improve my speaking English. Moreover, the United States of America is an expensive country for living and I will definitely need additional cash that may be spent on having fun and partying.
I hope you can help me by advising me how to find a decent job in your area. What sources should I use? Are printed newspapers a better source of information than the internet? In addition, I would like that you ask friends and acquaintances whether they need a new employee with my skills or not? I knew you have a large number of friends, maybe you will find me a job.
I am waiting for your prompt response.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
I arrive on 29th August and my studying begins on 1st September.
I will arrive on 29th August and my studying will begin on 1st September. //for future
need additional cash that may be spent on having fun and partying.
need additional cash on having fun and partying.
you will find me a job.
you will find a job for me.
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flaws:
1. words are not used efficiently or repeated, like:
help me by advising me
my curriculum has been sent to me
What sources should I use?
a better source of information
2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 227 250
No. of Characters: 949 1200
No. of Different Words: 142 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.181 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.799 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
well, you told here:
well, you told here:
As you know, I am going to study in your country for a year
it means you didn't 'arrive' there yet, it is for date, so need future tense
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 315, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... with my skills or not? I knew you have a large number of friends, maybe you will find me a job. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, consequently, frankly, may, moreover, so, in addition, in fact, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1006.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 225.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47111111111 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65794871245 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626666666667 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6865365213 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0666666667 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 16.8248392259 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 4.34317383033 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278801733128 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087989022291 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884737303268 0.0603063233224 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148630314684 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726276848323 0.0580467560999 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.05 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.