26.09.2017 Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends.They have just sent you some photos of your holiday.Write a letter to your friends. In your letter.Thank them for the photos and for the holidayExplain why you didn’t wr

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26.09.2017 Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends.
They have just sent you some photos of your holiday.
Write a letter to your friends. In your letter.
Thank them for the photos and for the holiday
Explain why you didn’t write earlier
Invite them to come and stay with you.

Dear John and Sarah,

I am writing to thank you for young hospitality and help.

To begin with, I want to thank you for showing me your city, your knowledge of landmarks and interesting places has made the holiday so remarkable and joyful. Moreover, I have just downloaded all the photos you sent to me; the quality of the picture is marvelous, you both have an incredible talent in taking photos and Sarah's novel camera makes everything looks better.

Also, I deeply apologize for not writing you earlier. The main reason for the delay is that my luggage was mistakenly sent to Moscow instead of Los Angeles. So, I had been waiting for my baggage for almost twenty-four hours till my bags arrived in LA. Moreover, when I arrived at the home, I learned that my landlord had forgotten to pay bills for electricity; thus, I lived for a while without this essential convenience.

Finally, I invite you to visit me this summer. By the time you arrive, I will have prepared a nice and thoughtful plan how to entertain you. Of course, you needn’t rent a flat of a hotel room because I rent a spacious apartment and you in my place as long as you wish.

I am waiting for your prompt response

Sincerely yours,

Eugen Dubinchuk

Votes
Average: 7 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...your prompt response Sincerely yours, Eugen Dubinchuk
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, look, moreover, so, thus, while, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1029.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 219.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69863013699 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62749582 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630136986301 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0533526373 44.8134815571 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5454545455 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 4.34317383033 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374657767231 0.216113520407 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138234169922 0.0766984524023 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626588093798 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170107521707 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101043381583 0.0580467560999 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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makes everything looks better.
makes everything look better.

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flaws:
It is not a good sentence with all subject pronouns, for example:

when I arrived at the home, I learned that my landlord had forgotten to pay bills for electricity; thus, I lived for a while without this essential convenience.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 220 350
No. of Characters: 969 1200
No. of Different Words: 140 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.851 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.405 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.509 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.562 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.785 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.211 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5