28.09.2017
New neighbours have recently moved into the house/flat next door to where you live. You have examinations soon, but your neighbours play music late at night which is affecting your studies and sleep.
Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter:
• explain what the problem is
• why it is causing you difficulties
• what action you would like them to take
Dear Mr. and Ms. Smith,
I am your next door neighbor and I am writing to complain about the loud music that is played in your flat.
To begin with, I am a graduate student and I have to prepare for important exams. Unfortunately, the music that usually is played late at night in your apartment does not allow me to concentrate on studying; moreover, because of the loud noise, I have insomnia. In other words, your love for rock music has had an adverse effect on my sleep and academic performance.
Primarily, the incoming examinations are really difficult and require a lot of effort and concentration but your habit to listen to music late at night makes it almost impossible to rest well or study. In fact, I can fell asleep only when the music stopped and when I go to bed earlier, before the music starts, I have terrible nightmares. Consequently, because of your conduct, I have a lack of sleep and it undermines my ability to stay focused on studying.
I see two possible solutions. Firstly, I would like that you started using headphones. They will allow you to listen to your favorite singers and groups at any time you wish. Secondly, if you can’t stand using headphones, I would recommend listening to music during a day or in the morning. I hope that it needn’t remind you that creating noise after 10:00 pm is prohibited by the law and if you continue acting in the same vein, police and your landlord will be informed.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Don't need to put transition words/phrases for every sentence, like:
In other words, Primarily, In fact, ...
They don't make the sentences smooth. Use them moderately in need.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 264 250
No. of Characters: 1173 1200
No. of Different Words: 160 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.443 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.806 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.685 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is usually
...nt exams. Unfortunately, the music that usually is played late at night in your apartment ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, in fact, mind you, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 937.175257732 132% => OK
No of words: 262.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73664122137 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74387133536 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606870229008 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9098820761 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4615384615 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 4.34317383033 236% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361387906207 0.216113520407 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108697808448 0.0766984524023 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748226841143 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176354483197 0.12726935374 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924834433308 0.0580467560999 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.