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30/10/2017You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city.Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter- Give your reasons for wanting the job- Explain why you think you can do

Essay topics: 30/10/2017
You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city.
Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter
- Give your reasons for wanting the job
- Explain why you think you can do the job
- Describe any relevant experience you have

EugeneDubinchuk's picture

Dear Sir or madame,

I am writing to express my interest in working at your firm as a local tour guide.

To begin with, my entire life has been spent in this beautiful city. I feel a deep love and a connection with this place and would like to share those feelings with guests. In addition, I heard your employees are given some special training, I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis, its history, landmarks and architecture.

Furthermore, I fit the job due to my personal characteristics. I am a well-educated, well-read, friendly, positive individual who likes to talk and socialize with others. Thus, clientele will be happy to work with me. Moreover, I am fluent in Russian, Greman, Spanish, Franch and can speak in Chinese and Japanese languages as well. So, I will be able to work with visitors from all over the world.

Finally, I have relevant experience as well. While working in a big international company as a part-time employee I have a duty to make foreign specialists comfortable in our city. So, I frequently give them improvised tours around the city. Also, I have already worked as an assistant of a tour guide for six months about a year ago in a rival company.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely yours,

Eugene Dubinchuk.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, i feel, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86425339367 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95035116189 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.669683257919 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1397361326 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6666666667 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7333333333 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 4.34317383033 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1453163392 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470882364717 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046645442215 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900322591737 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494499095766 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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I heard your employees are given some special training, I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis
I heard your employees are given some special training. I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis
I heard your employees are given some special training, and I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis

flaws:
1. for 'Explain why you think you can do the job':

since it is a weekend job, need to tell why choosing a weekend job.

2. most sentences start with subject 'I'.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 221 250
No. of Characters: 1010 1200
No. of Different Words: 147 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.856 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.57 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.814 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.211 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5

Dear Sir,
Explain why you think you can do the job':

1) I tried to write as a real email when interests and gains of my employer are discussed and my motives are omitted.
Is it a correct way to write the task 1?

2) Am I allowed to talk about my interests such as money, my profit etc?
Thank you.

1) I tried to write as a real email when interests and gains of my employer are discussed and my motives are omitted.
Is it a correct way to write the task 1?

A: we can write whatever we like if it is right on the topic. but better to choose something easier to find reasons. for example, in this essay, we may consider we are a college student. reasons will be very easy to develop and reasonale, if not, people will consider they are fake reasons no matter how real they are.

2) Am I allowed to talk about my interests such as money, my profit etc?
A: yes, why not, if it is right on the topic.

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