Although you have never formally studied computing you have always been interested in computers You have just read about a computer course that really interests you but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course Write a letter to the co

Essay topics:

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.
Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter
explain why you are writing
describe your circumstances
ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course
You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:
Dear
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am Ahmed Karem, and I am one of your students. I am writing to you because I need your help and advice regarding the new computer course.

Firstly, I am studying at NBA collage from 3 years; I am looking to enroll in the new course of computer course which will be held on 1st August. I would like to inform you that I have good knowledge of computer skills.

Secondly, due to some obstacles, I could not take any previous course on computer science; I made self-study which helped me to acquire significant information at this filed. In addition to that, I worked part-time for 2 years at an accounting office, and I used to use a computer at work.

Finally, I will appreciate it if you can help me to Enroll for the coming course; I need to increase my experience in this field. I know that I did not take the elementary course; I promise you that I have sufficient information in that. I suggest that if made a test for me, It would be better; you can satisfy my knowledge.

I look forward to hearing from you; should you require any further information, you can contact me. Here is my Number: 5555878.
Thanks in advance.

Faithfully,

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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..., and I used to use a computer at work. Finally, I will appreciate it if you can...
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...e better; you can satisfy my knowledge. I look forward to hearing from you; shou...
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...r; you can satisfy my knowledge. I look forward to hearing from you; shoul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 32.9175257732 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5046728972 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69178348205 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579439252336 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.13402061856 186% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1273952636 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3333333333 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 4.34317383033 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305136829245 0.216113520407 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107469364382 0.0766984524023 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870005067012 0.0603063233224 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137830990064 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803603471217 0.0580467560999 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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