Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a 34-year-old Iranian male who is studying for his master’s degree at the University of Melbourne. I am writing to announce to you my greatest enthusiastic about your job offer and to give you some information about myself concerning this job.
Actually, as an overseas student, I am in desperate need of acquiring knowledge about Australian culture in the account of enhancing my understanding around this very issue by means of cultural interchange. Thus, your job offer has created a great opportunity for me to nail this aim.
Whereas I am very good with little kids, although I do not have a baby, I had a chance to gain experience for helping my sister to bring up her little one for roughly six months. Accordingly, I have not only baby passionate but also experience for managing what you might expect me.
As I mentioned, I am a master student, therefore, I have ample time for my pastime which I rather spend it playing with your kid and if you let me take him/her to amusement park or playground to make a good memory for your baby and by some precious time for you to spend for yourself. Because I am totally aware of that a little free time would be as of a premium for you.
I would be appreciated if you consider inviting me over for an interview to know each other better, and I would be more than grateful if you let me be along with you during this six-month journey.
Should you need any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
SAEED NAJD ATAEI
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, if, look, so, therefore, thus, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 32.9175257732 164% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 937.175257732 141% => OK
No of words: 289.0 206.0 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57785467128 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79278841833 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 127.690721649 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59169550173 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 290.88556701 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8102766065 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.25 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 16.8248392259 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255835750194 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092462402045 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453904201533 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132615721504 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383680678277 0.0580467560999 66% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 41.2886597938 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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