Essay topics: You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child.Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details

Essay topics:

Essay topics: You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family

for six months and look after their six- year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

- Explain why you would like the job

- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in connection with an advertisement from a popular magazine requiring a stay for 6 months and taking care of your kid.

I love taking up this opportunity as it would help my financial status lifted and additionally fulfilling my basic needs. Although, the current market demands are high, i am finding it hard to get a job. Hence, this choice will get off the stress levels.

I have been looking after my neice and nephew for almost 5 years now along with my sister's family while i stayed with them during my graduation studies. Needless to say, i become a kid when playing with them and baby sitting when they are out for work. Now that they are moving out to a different city on job demands, i am interested in moving in with you guys for the requested period provided that you are happy with me. Even though there are lots of options, I choose this as child care interest me.

Furtheremore, i will be preparing for my certification during the free time. Waiting to hear from you on this.

Yours faithfully,

Ruby

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55958549223 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56322243761 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658031088083 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4131667085 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5454545455 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190857122698 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617088118394 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560333237105 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101245923461 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680471224809 0.0580467560999 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.