Got an admission in English speaking country. Told your frienda) how long you should stay forb)what are the thing you should bringc) what are you going to do here

Essay topics:

Got an admission in English speaking country. Told your friend
a) how long you should stay for
b)what are the thing you should bring
c) what are you going to do here

Dear Mr. Tom,

I want to let you know that I am coming to Canada in next month. I am going to stay here for 2 years. I want to know what are the things should I carry with me. I got an admission in post-graduate course in one of the best university here under scholarship program, so i decided not to miss this golden opportunity.
As you are staying here from last 5 years, so you are quite aware of the city. Moreover i got an admission in your city only, but i am worried about this new country. As I have no experience to go outside my home town and my parents are also worried about this.

i want to know what are the things should I take with me as I have read that this is very cold city, so should I bring winter clothes like, jackets,quilts,warmers etc. Any grocery items that are not avilable here should I bring? you can ask me anything to bring for you as you have not came to our country from long back.

As, I already told you that I got an admission in PG course, I am selected by one of the guide for thesis statement which is related to my interest and I got a free admission here.

I look forward to meet to you soon.

Your friend,

karan

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...h. I am going to stay here for 2 years. I want to know what are the things should...
^
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... are the things should I carry with me. I got an admission in post-graduate cours...
^
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sity here under scholarship program, so i decided not to miss this golden opportu...
^
Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...rs, so you are quite aware of the city. Moreover i got an admission in your city only, b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...u are quite aware of the city. Moreover i got an admission in your city only, but...
^
Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...got an admission in your city only, but i am worried about this new country. As I...
^
Line 6, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: I
...arents are also worried about this. i want to know what are the things should...
^
Line 6, column 2, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...arents are also worried about this. i want to know what are the things should...
^
Line 6, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , quilts
...uld I bring winter clothes like, jackets,quilts,warmers etc. Any grocery items that are...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...t are not avilable here should I bring? you can ask me anything to bring for you as...
^^^
Line 6, column 288, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...ything to bring for you as you have not came to our country from long back. As, I...
^^^^
Line 8, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...country from long back. As, I already told you that I got an admission in PG c...
^^
Line 10, column 16, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to meeting'.
Suggestion: to meeting
... free admission here. I look forward to meet to you soon. Your friend, karan ...
^^^^^^^
Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... you soon. Your friend, karan
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, moreover, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 950.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.13043478261 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52638253154 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552173913043 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9379512947 44.8134815571 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0769230769 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6923076923 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 2.54639175258 550% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405215921261 0.216113520407 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131979032236 0.0766984524023 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619536820628 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209710435215 0.12726935374 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456087672778 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 8.37731958763 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.38 8.71597938144 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 7.59969072165 83% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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