ou are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:Say what the problem is.Describe the accommoda

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ou are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
Say what the problem is.
Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
Ask the provider to solve the problem.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my disappointment for the accommodation provided to me in Canada.

As you are aware that I am pursuing a 3 months Human Resource course in Toronto and I am residing at the accommodation provided by you. Unfortunately, the place is not upto my expectations. It has a filthy neighbourhood. Also, the flat is not fully furnished.

Since, I am a vegetarian. I had requested for a fully-furnished flat with a refrigerator. As, I can store my food in it. I was expecting a studio apartment with a good surrounding. Also, I had requested for an accommodation which will be close to college.

Could you please look into the matter and resolve it as soon as possible. I will be grateful to you, if you can provide me a better living space near to the campus.

Looking forward to your prompt response.

Yours faithfully,
Jessica Ayri

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...so, the flat is not fully furnished. Since, I am a vegetarian. I had requested for...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lly-furnished flat with a refrigerator. As, I can store my food in it. I was expec...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 154.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77922077922 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31568386419 2.54303337028 130% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649350649351 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9483000729 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 52.5714285714 76.5299724578 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.0 16.8248392259 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 4.34317383033 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0850435422754 0.216113520407 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270608302921 0.0766984524023 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326672338194 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0425810944079 0.12726935374 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268650008425 0.0580467560999 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 70.7449484536 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.26 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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