The pie charts show women's highest level of education in Someland in two years:1945 and 1995

Essay topics:

The pie charts show women's highest level of education in Someland in two years:1945 and 1995

The pie charts below indicate the percentage of the highest level education of women in Someland between 1945 and 1995.Overall,it is clear that there were significant differences between the percentage of the level education of women in this period.However,there was an increase rapidly in the level education of women for first degree.
Firstly,the percentage of third grade made up the highest in 1945 with 35%.The proportion of no schooling came in second level education at 25% while both the percentage of third grade and no schooling did not make up in 1995.Moreover,there was a sharp increase from 4% to 20% in the percentage of year 12 level.Beside,the proportion of first degree in 1995 recorded the highest proportion with 50% compared with 1% in 1945.
Finally,the proportion of post graduate level education recorded 20% in 1995.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 709.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 135.0 206.0 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25185185185 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.4086580994 3.78020617076 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47619772414 2.54303337028 137% => OK
Unique words: 73.0 127.690721649 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540740740741 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 212.4 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 12.6804123711 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 16.3608247423 275% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 147.284305568 44.8134815571 329% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.333333333 76.5299724578 309% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.0 16.8248392259 267% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.0 4.34317383033 553% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330282705465 0.216113520407 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232287832555 0.0766984524023 303% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113419575346 0.0603063233224 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232287832555 0.12726935374 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113419575346 0.0580467560999 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.8 8.37731958763 308% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 70.7449484536 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 3.82989690722 339% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 7.45979381443 279% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.06 8.71597938144 161% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 41.2886597938 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 8.62886597938 348% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 8.54432989691 234% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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