Title you are thinking of applying to do postgraduate studies at an overseas university or college Write to the admission office In your letter Introduce yourself Request information about entry requirement tuition fees and the availability of accommodati

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Title: you are thinking of applying to do postgraduate studies at an overseas university or college
Write to the admission office. In your letter
— Introduce yourself
— Request information about entry requirement, tuition fees and the availability of accommodation on campus

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this email in regards to enquiries of information about MBA course at your university.
To begin with, I have been currently working for KPMG Vietnam since 2017, one of the top deal advisory and auditing companies in the world. I have learnt from my friend that your university is offering an interesting MBA course, containing many case-studies and substantial range of knowledge.
However, MBA course-related information on your website is very limited and lack of clarity. I am wondering if you can provide the brochure of this course with full detail of entry requirement and tuition fee. These sort of information will be really helpful for me to have a good preparation in advance. In addition, as I prefer living nearby the university, it would be great if information about the availability of accommodation on campus is given as well. Your assistance in this matter is much appreciated.
I enclose the detail of my contact address with this letter for your reference. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Linh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this email in regards to en...
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Line 2, column 25, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...ar Sir/Madam, I am writing this email in regards to enquiries of information about MBA cour...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'These nulls'?
Suggestion: This sort; These nulls
...l of entry requirement and tuition fee. These sort of information will be really helpful f...
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Line 6, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Linh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, really, so, well, in addition, sort of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.85567010309 311% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 178.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06741573034 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02608280192 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662921348315 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8720949911 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 4.34317383033 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181970756582 0.216113520407 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635749087213 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332066834132 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102261165697 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320264188553 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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